Tuesday, October 31, 2006

WSU students play it safe

There was a bad cutline for the dominate photo of the SafeRiders article. The cutline reads "Students can enjoy alcoholic beverages and not worry about driving home with SafeRiders." The way it is written makes it sound like students are currently worried about driving home with SafeRiders, but if they drink alcholic beverages, they won't have to worry. A better to write that cutline would have been "With SafeRiders, students can enjoy alcholic beverages and not worry about driving home."

I also thought the eighth paragraph made little sense. "For these students, Brown said he believes the program is relevant to WSU students' lives." I'm sorry. What? Perhaps it would have been better to cut out the first part and just leave "Brown believes the program is relevent to students' lives."

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