Sunday, November 26, 2006

Diversity at the WSU

Today's eagle had a story on the first page that was about the minority hiring at the WSU. Obviously this has became a major issue for the university. What I want to point out, and correct me if I am wrong, is that this uproar started after the Sunflower published a story where Reuben Eckels said minorities are not well represented among WSU faculty and staff.
If I am right than this would be a good example of the major role newspapers can play, even if they are small and, as some would say, unimportant newspaper such as the Sunflower.


Blogger Beka said...

There was a story in the Sunflower not too long ago entitled “A madame who inspires”. I was really bored after work today so I decided to take a closer look the article and I have a few points of constructive criticism. First, the very first sentence is way too long in my opinion. “Gail Burkett is a native Kansan who has been fortunate to have a lot of real world experience, and after six years of teaching college, that experience has won her the 2006 Kansas French Educator of the Year award.” It should have been cut down to two separate sentences to make it sound a little more interesting rather than dragging it out. Second, there is a sentence in the next paragraph that says “I had a wonderful time,” she said. “My schedule…” In my opinion, there should have been a comma after “she said”, instead of a period, because the following quote was not very much longer than the beginning quote. Further into the story there was a sentence that really through me off. “As a long time fan of WU basketball, taking time for herself was important to Burkett.” It is so off-the-wall, it doesn’t make sense by itself, and certainly doesn’t make sense in the context of the story. There were a few other minor grammatical errors, but I think this entry is long enough as it is!

12/04/2006 10:27 PM  
Blogger Beka said...

The last story I’ll edit is one from the same edition of the Sunflower, and was entitled “One terrific interview could earn $42,000”. Beginning with the second sentence, the author mistakenly put “students completed in the annual event” instead of “students competed”. A few sentences down it says “To be a considered, students…”, there should obviously be no “a” in there. I also have a problem with the second half of that sentence…”students had to have a score of 24 on the ACT and a 3.5 grade point average.” To me it sounds like you have to have the exact score and the exact grade point average. I know it’s nit-picking, but I would have put “students had to have a score of 24 or higher on the ACT and a minimum of a 3.5 GPA”. Finally, there are two one-sentence paragraphs that seem to just be thrown in the mix that stopped the flow of the story, and didn’t do a whole lot to add to it. They read, “Some parents accompanied students to the competition. Linda Kelly-Hassett and daughter, Erin Hassett, came all the way from Longmont, Colo.” If it were up to me, those would have been cut from the story completely.

12/04/2006 10:28 PM  
Blogger Beka said...

and I just realized that I wrote "through me off" instead of "threw me off"!

12/04/2006 10:29 PM  

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